Hey Jon,
I randomly came across this on craigslist, it's a short story. Click here for the link. This guy has a great sense of timing and dialogue, and he plays with the use of verbs for effect in a really dynamic way. It reminded me a bit to you...
You definitely have a good sense of plot progression, and you create tension really well for a new writer! Here are some thoughts on things you should keep an eye out for:
Timing - not in terms of plot pacing, but in terms of the time over which ...
Hi Haley,
Thanks for posting this excerpt from your story. The first thing that struck me about your writing is that you have very clearly played this scene out in your head. You know where objects are placed, how your characters move, what they ...
I started reading this story while sitting at my desk at work earlier this week, and only got about half way through. I just finished reading the rest of it. There is a definite narrative strength. I know because I didn't need to re-read the first...